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Life Of An Easy. 

“I feel mad! I feel sad!”
“ Tai it's time to go school”
“Mum I’m not ready yet”
“ You are going to have to be”
“ Why’s that mum?”
“Because the bus is going to be here in 10 minutes”
“Oh it is”
“Ok Tai. I’m going to work now. Bye” 
(7 minutes later bus arrives)

“Hi Tai”
“Hi Gene”
“Oi look it’s Tai with all her mate’s”
“STOP IT”
 “Or else what?”
“Or else I will…..”
“You will what ayy?”
“I'll be the bigger person and walk away”
“You do that”
“I will do it”
“Tai you ok?”
“Yep”
“Are you sure?”
“Now what have I ever done to her to do that to me”
“I don't know”
“ Me to”
“Probably just jealous”
“True that”
(Tai arrives at school)

“Hey Tai can i talk with you?”
“Why that Kate”
“I heard you’ve been picked on”
“Who told you?”
“No one”
“Was it Gene?”
“Yes how did you know?”
“Because he's only one I trust”
“Well I'm taking it to the principal”
“Please don't “
“Why?”
“Because they will beat me up”
“No they won't. As long as you’ve got Gene you will be find”
“I feel safe now that you said that”
“I’m going to the principal now. O.K Tai?”
(20 minutes later)

“Tai the girl is going to the principal”
“Oh my life thank you for having my back”
“No problem”
“You and Gene are the best”
“No you are, for opening up to me”
(The next morning)

“Tai your principal rang me and said that  you have been bullied”
“Mum I’m so sorry that I didn't tell you earlier”
“It’s not ok that you keep that a secret”
“I know”
“And I thought you were safe the whole time”
“ I was”
“ No you were not”
“Gene was help me through the whole thing”
“ I know Gene would help you”
“ I'm really sorry Mum for keeping it a secret”
“Ok next time tell me it I'm always here for you”
“I know Mum I love you “
“But now the girls won't be bothering you”
“Why that mum?”
“They got suspended”
“Oh my gosh”
 “And from now on I will be taking you and Gene to school”
“OK that sounds good mum”


What I was good at.
Telling my story with dialogue so my reader gets to know my characters by what They say.
Using “” to show when someone is talking.
Including a beginning middle and ending.
Sharing feelings that my reader can relate to.
   



What I need to work on.
Organising my dialogue into paragraph.
More detail about how the problem was solved(What mum said to Tai)

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