The Market

The Market:
“Mum are we going to the market??.”
I love the market. You can expect me to be seen at the weekend nearly every weekend. The delicious food is the reason why I go back to the market every weekend.
“Were at the market now” I feel so happy! Time to eat the food. As I am walking around I can see people walking around with food. “Mum, can we buy some kebabs.?” I start waiting in line, it takes a long time to get my kebabs but it is worth the wait.

I can taste the divine kebabs as the juice from the meat hits my lips.  I feel a satisfaction as the kebabs fill up my stomach. I begin walking around the market and I see tons of people.
I hear people yelling,screaming and laughing really loud. (REALLY LOUD!!.)

Then my mother tells me “Time to go home.” “Aww, but we can come back next week.”
By ugene and  Sophie


  • I was good at sharing my experience at the market and adding detail to hook in my reader.
  • I was also good at organising my ideas in order using paragraphs.

  • I think I need to work on adding more detail to my story to make it more interesting.

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